Englishintermediate2im2015: Life circles: talking about a life experience!

Tuesday, August 11, 2015

Life circles: talking about a life experience!

Hi all!

Hope you are doing well! Welcome to our first activity. Please, post your comments before August 17th, 8 p.m!

1. Think about one personal life experience you want to talk about. It can be related to any topic.

2. Before writing: make a brainstorming to get some ideas for writing.

3. Write paragraphs considering the suggested format (introduction, main idea, climax, supporting ideas and conclusion). It must have 200 words at least and be creative.

4. Tips for writing:

Language use / writing aspects:

- Simple sentence structure.
- Include as much details as possible.

- Useful vocabulary you need to express your ideas.
- Grammar, spelling, punctuation rules, etc.

- Coherence and cohesion.
- Useful conectors or linking words.

All your writings will be welcome as comments... Thanks for participating!

54 comments:

Fernanda15 August 2015 at 23:21
WHEN I BEGAN TO STUDY AT PRIMARY SCHOOL .
This story began in January of 2001, I was very exited, and the school would be my firsth important experience remebered by me . My mother took me to school.
I remember that a big bag was carry in my back.When I went inside the classroom, the teacher was waiting for me, and I looked different people from my family.I set down, and the teacher said tha I migh beging to paint a draw, and I thought that I didn´t have colours, at that momento I felt very scared, due to I did know some friend helped me.At that momento I met with my first fríend and school, her name was Elizabeth, and she asked me if I needed colours, and I smiled.
After that, I just had talked with her, I was a introverted girl and I could not have a lot of friends because I did talk much, this has been my problem since that time. One day the teacher call my mom, and she told her my problem, but I was trying to have a conversation with my classmates but I could not .
One day my mome talked me about a that, anda since that time, I began to talk with other people because I discovered that I needed to meet different friends,and discovered the best friend in my life.

Luisa Fernanda Vargas Bolívar
201220060
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YADISA16 August 2015 at 09:14
THE FIRST TIME THAT I SAW MY LIFE´S LOVE.

It was on November 22, was on Saturday and the day began. First I was so scared and confused because I did not know anything about that. I arrived to the place and I ate fruits salad, then I went to the second floor because a person was waiting for me there. She gave me the welcome and she asked me some questions about me. Then she said me that I had to go to a special place, so I went with her. My heard was very accelerated and I was so nervous! I thought that it was very fast but not! The pain was beginning the labor contractions lasted for twenty-four hours exactly! I cried so much, I suffered all the time, I screamed too!!and the time was slowly. At the end I was very tired and I did not want to know about anything! But the waited moment came! And on Sunday at 8.30 in the morning I knew my girl , my little baby , she was very tender, beautiful , I was very tired but I was very happy because I loved she and since that moment I saw for first time to my life`s love.

YADISA MAIRENA CORDON PARRA
201022050
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Erlenzi Quintero16 August 2015 at 14:38
A LECTION OF LIFE
Long time ago, when I was a girl, I lived in a little town and I studied in a big place. One day, I was very late to arrive at the school, in addition a rainstorm began and I did not have an umbrella, for that, I was drenched. I was so angry, so my solution was to run very quickly until bathrooms. So I was there, trying to clean my uniform. In That moment, I heard footsteps coming through the hall to the bathroom, which made me feel so scared. therefore , I ran to hide me in a little room, standing there, I could hear one person walking in circles, I could see a brown boots in front of me trying to push my door. In that moment, came to me a thought of looking for a gun to defend myself but I only found a pen. My hearth beat so faster (obviously he wanted to hurt me) once and for all, this person walked outside but before, he turned off and turned on the lights many times. I was very sorry to enter there alone. So I prayed God to save me of that guy. I waited some seconds after that the man had left, and then, I ran to the classroom as quickly as I could. My teacher told me that I was very late, however, the teacher allowed me to enter the class. After, the bell rang to take a break so my best friend told me: "come on! Or may be... Are you scared about the dark bathrooms?”
Erlenzi Quintero
201312281
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Angélica Martínez16 August 2015 at 14:54
The suicide forest dream

One day I met a guy from San José del Guaviare, more than a relation of work it was becoming in a friendship, so we started to talk more than a casual relation so much that he decided invite me to know his hometown, it was a huge advantage because my interest was about some kind of trees that I could find there. Excited by the work, next morning I went alone to a forest near to my friend’s house, there were a big amount of beautiful trees so many that my mobile had not signal but it did not care, the forest had something that called me to get into it, I was so persuade that forget almost all about me and I just started to walk through it, when a creak under my feet made me react, I hanged my head and saw something that looked like a human bone, so afraid I ran back to the road, luckily I was not far from it and suddenly I crashed with a strange man and screamed aloud. The man was just a citizen crossing the road, he knew my friend so he started to walk in signal of carry me to home, I thanked so much to man, I went to the living room, all my friend’s family was gathered in a very sad way so I asked to his sister, what happened and she said that her brother was lost anyone had seen them during all day, we were so worried about my friend so I told her about my experience at the forest and I knew that it was called “The suicide forest” where had been found hundreds of dead people. Near to the forest I heard my friend’s mobile so I walked close to the sound and in a tree handing by a rope was my friend! …and yes at that moment I woke up! I was too afraid and sweating. It was the most terrifying nightmare I never had and I feel scare when I think about it…

Angélica Katerin Martínez Huertas
201210009
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cielo17 August 2015 at 07:59

ABOUT CHOOSING CAREER AND WHY SAY “I LOVE YOU” ON TIME IS IMPORTANT…
I was born in Raquira on September 18 of 1994, I grew my first stage of life with my grandparents but when I got older, I do not remember well how old I was at that time, I think I was six or seven, I went to live with my mother and my siblings, was really difficult for me to adapt to that, but with difficult I could , years after my grandfather died and my grandmother was alone so she went to live with us and again I was really happy,most of you are thinking What this have relation to choose a career? For me it has a relation…When my grandmother arrived to live with us, were some problems and we came to live here in Tunja, I was very sad again, my grandmother was like my mother, she was everything for me and now most of the things that I do I dedicate to her,well, one day she got really ill, and time passed and she got more serious ill at that point that she could not move her left part of the body, and I care her everyday after school, passing time with her was really amazing after all time that I had been away from her,when I had the opportunity to say that I loved her, I did it, later she died, was old and she really needed to rest, when she died what made me feel better and stronger was that I had had the opportunity to tell her how much I loved her and other people did not take advantage of that opportunity even when they had the opportunity too and after I saw faces telling sorry mom when was really late, then I felt really proud and happy because she always knew that was somenone in this world that loved her more than everything.
I finished school one year after her death,my mother wanted that I study some engineering and my grandmother always wanted a doctor,so I bought my university pin and I choose medicine for my first option, that was for my grandmother but my heart told me that I knew that was not what I really wanted even that like me too, fortunately my score was low for that career and I felt happy,I learnt that it does not matter what I choose I know that if is something that makes me happy my grandmother will be agree because she loved me and wanted my happiness first, mommy was insisting about an engeneering but what I wanted the most was be fly attendant because the idea of travel and know lots of countries and learn languages,mommy said Cielo please, so I said ok then I’m going to study languages and she said are you crazy? She did not want this for me because she studied modern languges at UPTC, but is about what we feel comfortable with, not about live life that our parents could not, I have the pleasure to say that I choose the correct thing because I love what I’m learning, I love everything in my world now, some things are missing but God and time will give us what is really for us, for our lifes… I choose modern languages because I feel passion for this, at the beginning I felt bad with my grandmother’s dream, but was her dream not mine even I love her I’m here and she is gone forever, I have to be strong and live what is for me.
That is the importance to say I love you on time and decide about your life, love someone does not mean do what they want you to do…

CIELO CATALINA MONTENEGRO BUITRAGO
201310563
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 11:49
KIDS' GAMES

This story started when I was nine years old with a friend called Sebastian. My parents worked all day and I liked to play outside with a small ball that was of my older brother, I always secretly took the ball and went to play outside with my friends; but my parents did not like a girl play in the street because there were many dangers.

One day, I met a boy called Sebastian who also liked to play. He lived across the street from my house. His parents were working all day so Sebastian was alone in his house because he had no brothers. Since that day, every afternoon I went to his house to play with a ball.

One afternoon, I went to play with him but he said he could not play because his parents had taken his ball in order to he made his homework. Then I return to my home very sad and I realized that my older brother’s ball was at home, so I go back to my friend's house and told him that I had a ball to play. I last a long time trying to convince him to play with me until he accepted.

We played to charge penalties and who made more goals earned a sweet. Then, Sebastian told me he was tired of playing and I told him that he should cover my last shot to win. Then he stood next to the door and I shot the ball with all my strength when suddenly the ball fell off the faucet that was in the garage and all the water began to irrigate.

I immediately ran to my house. I was crying when my brother came and asked me what had happened, I told him the whole truth and both returned home from Sebastian. But when my brother was closing water record, Sebastian's parents arrived and realized what had happened.

They talked to my parents and they were angry, they do not let me go back to Sebastian's house and they had to pay a settlement of the key broke. I did not go back to talk with Sebastian because his parents thought I was a bad girl.
Six months later, Sebastian's father got a job in Bogota and they all went to live there. Since that accident, my parents would not let me go outside to play and I could just play with my brothers in the garage of my house. Until today, I have not spoken again with him…

The reflection of this story is that in our childhood the most important is to have friends and play with them to share many experiences. However, some "tricks of children" may cause we lose an honest friendship for our mistakes and by the decision of our parents.

Tania Alejandra Nieto Espinosa
Code: 201310044
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Anonymous17 August 2015 at 12:45
PUMPS CHEWING GUM ARE DANGEROUS FOR LONG HAIR

I am going to talk about my best anecdote that I always remember. The story began when I was seven years old and I lived in Boyaca Boyaca town. I lived with my parents and my siblings in a big house and in where lived more people. One day a neighbor invited me to see a movie and I said him of course. My neighbor had a beautiful family, they are his wife and two pretty girls, their names were Xiomara who was twelve years old, and Angela who was two years old.

At that time the chewing gum was fashionable so before going to see the movie I bought three chewing gums. When every one of us were watching the movie I began to do pumps. I was very concéntrate seeing the movie and making pumps; when I did a big pump and it glue into the Angela´s hair. I was very shame, so for that reason I tried to take away the chewing gum of the Angela´s hair, but the girl cried, and then the father stopped the movie and saw the girl, at that moment I stopped too and also Angela stopped of crying, thus the movie continued. That happened three times because in the four intent the father saw me and said ´Oh my God! How is possible? Also father loved that his girls had a long hair, and said me ´ You girl left my room and not come back´.

As a conclusion, if you have chewing gum, you never make pumps where there are long hairs near.

Name: Laura Katherine Silva Nova
Code: 201310003
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 14:09
"The curve of the mare"

This happened in 2008. One day my father decided to take a walk to Miraflores -Boyacá to visit an uncle who lived in this small town. We enjoyed this holiday with my family.

All was well until the time of homecoming. Upon reaching the moor which lies between the town of Ramiriquí and Zetaquira, we prick; the problem was complicated because nobody could loosen a screw and the tools did not function. Then the cars to give us aid, ended up hurting their tools too. Even a truck driver of thick texture, he mounted above the crosshead, tried to loosen the screw, but unfortunately, the tool broke.

At about 5: 30 pm, seeing that no solution was found and the day grew dark and the fog was too dense. My father decided to go to Ramiriquí to find a mechanic and my brother needed to call his girlfriend, and when he went to check his cell phone he realized that it did not have sign, then he asked me to accompany him to find signal. We got away about two blocks when I felt someone was watching us, then I looked back but due the weather, I could not identify who he was. I did not pay much attention, I thought I was imagining it and I kept walking normally. While my brother was on the phone, I observed a man roughly 45-year-old dressed in ruana and black pants. I was impressed at the sight it and immediately I told my brother to look, but he could not see anyone and he started to laugh at me telling me I was crazy, but the person still there. Seeing that my brother did not believe me, I returned to the car and left my brother alone, one minute after, my brother got scared because the phone was switched off alone and he was without light.

My dad arrived about 9pm, and the mechanic managed to loosen the screw easily, without any effort and finally, he told us a story about this place called the "the curve of the mare” where many people have been frightened, and it has never come to know who or why this.
I hope never to have to return to that place.

Diana Hernández
201220088
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 15:44
Cupid: Don't laugh at me!

You might have a crush with someone in a specific time of your life… But there is always a big energy that wants you to be alone. That’s my story. Que Yen… A handsome boy, nice smile, athletic, charismatic. I felt in love with him when he asked me for a picture. I was really happy because I was studying Mandarin and I was able to practice with him. It was nice to know that in China, Colombian people are kind and friendly. It was the first time that someone didn't say me something like: Hey! Sell me some drugs.

Perhaps it’s something impossible, but you can fell in love at the first sight. His life was Taekwondo and Taekwondo was cupid in this sad love story, or funny story? I know that if I wasn’t able to gain courage, I would lose my life’s opportunity. So, I asked him if he had a lover or something. He, kindly, answered me that nobody (girls) liked him and I was really surprised because he had all I have ever wanted! And so on, we continued talking about every topic that you can imagine. We even had similar music tastes. I was in my own dream. I was the main character along with him. We loved Korea, kpop, Korean dramas, Korean girls and boys. Obviously he loved Korean girls and also Colombian girls, well… Me, to be accurate. There was a moment that I really didn’t understand him because he wasn’t use to speaking in English and my Mandarin is pretty bad so, we decided to ask for help.

My volleyball coach was in China for two years and he could speak fluently Mandarin. That was my chance! I asked him to say to Que Yuen that, for me, he was a handsome boy and he just started to laugh. As we didn’t understand anything, we look at each other with Que Yuen without understanding nothing. Then, I realized that something was wrong. I clearly remember that question: Do you want him or her? Because she is a girl. All my world stopped. I blushed. I wanted to hide under a stone. He said to her that all that time I thought she was a boy and the only thing she said to me was like: “Oh, no. I’m a girl. How cute you are.” Cupid was laughing at me. Love faded away. Until that second my lovely story arrived to an end and… Well, people say that nothing is forever. Now I believe it!

Ángela Galvis Pineda
201310076
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Anonymous17 August 2015 at 17:01
The best decision in my life!
This story begin a day as any other day of my life when I went at university, I talked with my friends, I worked in a cinema and I lived without any anxiety about my life. All seems to be clear for me. However, that day happened something will leave a big mark in my life and the other people lives for ever.
I had a boyfriend and we had about 3 years together, but in that moment our relationship was having problems, also we had not talked for days and we had begun to separate. Further I had known that my body was not the same, I was feeling sick, and I had stomachache, headache, dizziness and all time after each meal I wanted to vomit. I had a presentiment. But i did not want to think it. That same day during the classes I had felt very bad, so i decided to make a pregnancy prove I made it as son as I could although i must wait until afternoon for knowing the result. I was worried finally the afternoon arrived I was running for the medical exam before that I had called my ex boyfriend for telling about the situation. And he said me lets see in the hospital. I was agreeing.
We met there; we talked about how we had been. then I asked for the result the nurse tell me that I must enter a room so I was peaceful because she has a good face he asked me sit down obviously I made it she said me congratulation you are pregnant! So i could think, I felt that my heart had stopped for a second and my mind was totally in White I only want to cry and run away. She was telling me Are you ok? Are you ok? but I only listened a far voice that I am unable to understand she bring a glass with water suddenly I saw my boyfriend he was very afraid and asked the nurse what happened? She said you are pregnant. He said me go to home and I walked as a zombie afterward we went to a park we were talking for hours and my position was ever the same I wont have a baby because I did not searching it, in addition I did not know take care of a baby I was not ready and my father? I could not say that I was pregnant when before I had promised him I never defraud him and now I was pregnant what will happen with my goals? My dreams? My family? My future planes? We were shouting he hug and say don’t worry i am here but it is not important for me I wont have a baby and I had decided.
Later I went to my home few day I was bad thinking, thinking and thinking I thought better and it was good for anybody I was pregnant but it was my life other people opinions did not have to be important for me I thought in my father in my siblings my friends all of them know that I have force in my heart for getting all that I wanted. I had changed my decision now I will fight against the world for my baby although i knew i will have several changes in my life although every people were disagree with me. I was absolutely sure about my decision.
Finally the nine month passed. The baby will have to arrive. When I saw her for first time I felt as a big hug in my soul. I felt that she beautiful girl was all mine I could see the happiness. Her eyes, her mouth, her face, her hands, all her body was absolutely perfect and she had been in my body i loved her since the first moment furthermore I felt that a mother and her baby are two souls join for ever. Now I know the real love. Difficult? Yes. Beautiful? Totally, I do not know any thing more beautiful like this I love her eternally.
For all of that, Usually when someone asks me talk about the most important person in my life I have ever said it is my Little daughter Sofia, but each time is different because every day i find in my daughter a new reason for in loving more and more of her.
JENNYFER SÁNCHEZ

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Unknown17 August 2015 at 17:01
WONDER GIRL IN BICYCLE
This anecdote is about my favorite hobby when I was a girl.
Since I was a little baby, I have live in a farm with my grandmother. I was a restless girl and my favorite game was to ride bicycle. When I was 8 years old, an uncle gave me my first bicycle, I loved it and every day, I went out to do races with my friends.

At the moment of my life I have have 4 bicycles and when I was twelve years old I had my second bicycle. One day my grand mom and I were going to go to the neighbor house and she told me: - “DON´T TAKE OUT THE BICYCLE because it doesn't have enough brakes. Obviously with my bike I felt the wonder girl, the super girl and I didn't take notice and I took out my bicycle.

She repeated me: -“don´t take out the bicycle” and I answered: -“don´t worry grand mom, I don´t need brakes”.

But, near of my neighbors’ exists a slope and there I lost control of my bike and like It did not have breaks, I crashed into a wall.

Fortunately, I didn't have serious injuries, only I grazed my hands, knees, elbows, but in that moment I only listened to a voice that told me:
-“I TOLD YOU SO!”

In spite of I continued to ride bicycle and I had many others falls but the most important that I could learn is that when your mother in my case my grandmother warns you something is holy word.
:) :)
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 17:39
I AM TITANIUM
My last December was really meaningful. In this time of the year I usually had worked in a clothing store in my city, but in that occasion I worked as a babysitter in a place so far of my family.

When I was offered this job, it was fine for me. It was completely unexpected, but it was something which suited my needs. In that moment was irrelevant for me that I was to live with an unknown family, or I was to be so far of my family for a long time.
The tradition in my family has been always to share a lot of time together in that time of the year. And for that reason I think it was so hard for me. But I noticed this when I was in my work place, so far away from them.

I met an incredible boy, Ian. He is two years old and the time that I could share with him was definitely amazing. His parents are very kind people; they are musical technical producers and their job demand a lot of time. So, I was taking care of him. I confirmed that I really love children. I have had experience working on it because I have seven nephews and two nieces so I have had direct contact with this along my life.

We have plans to travel so much because of their work, but occurred something totally sudden. I suffered an accident that blocked these plans. Doctors had to do a surgery to me and now I have screws in my left foot due to a fracture. As a result of the accident. I have been in a recovering process pretty hard.

At the time I am still in contact with Ian ‘family, confirming the affection between us. I will be always grateful with them for their hospitality and confidence.
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 19:08
It is really important!
I want to tell this story, because I want to show them the importance of parents in the childhood, and consequence, when a child doesn't have parents, so when I was a child, I lived with my grandparents because my mother traveled to United States, she went in search of the American dream,I have two years old when it occurred, my brothers and me lived in different houses and different persons for example with aunts,uncle,cousin and the end with my grandparents.I didn't know my mother, I saw her through photos and I knew her for letters, but I wanted to see her and touch her, that was very sad for my brothers and me, she gave us gifts, presents, clothes and other things,but I only wanted to share special moments like my birthday,Christmas and many more.
we lived with different people in conclusion we never lived together that was the first consequence because is hard to whatever person can not stay in family as whatever family the normal in the life,while we lived and suffered here for cause maybe of destiny I don't know, my mother had several problems in that Country, spend time and when I was thirteen years my mother come back, after 11 years later, it was difficult because my brothers and me were at the time of revelation;we don't respect nobody and we had negative feelings and resentment with the life, in special with my mom we didn't understand; why did she go to other country?
I left the house when I was fourteen years; that was second consequence, those are some consequences there are others for example my older brother always felt alone they know the drugs, he didn't have a person that help him, for this reason he is drug addict, I consider that he has suffered more than me, or maybe I have been strong, so when I was mother's house I was pregnant of my first son, I got a independent job, I had my son with my first boyfriend, we were very young for this reason two years later we separated.
then I met my husband, we have two children he has been as father to my first son, we are together since 2004, we have had difficult moments but we are a great family, I work,I study,I take care of my children because they are the reason to live and to follow fighting every day. I have my own apartment and we are paying a car, but for me those are material things; the most important in this life is "SHARE WITH OUR FAMILIES" it doesn't have price, in conclusion: I learned that my acts to affect the life of my children and I don't want to repeat parent's mistakes.

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Unknown17 August 2015 at 19:38
I CHOSE THAT MEMORY
I am going to start saying that when you believe strong enough in something your mind accept that as a real fact.
When I was five my family moved to a new house, this would be our own house. They were exited but I was more because my godfather, his name is Eliecer, lived near the new house and my school was near too. The neighborhood was better than the one we were living before and there were children everywhere for playing. My godfather and my uncle had been married for three years and they had not had babies and I was the little spoiled of them. I have a sister, her name is Ingrid, but she is older than me four years so, I was the little baby for them, especially for Eliecer.
Each morning after school I visited him. He gave me a big hug, and then he gave me a candy after this I ran to my house.
One night while we were sharing in a coffee bar in the center of the city, two men in black were checking us in a mysterious way. I saw them to their eyes and they looked at me. I did not understand what was happening but the men disappeared suddenly. I was sitting in my godfather legs.
That was the last time I saw my second father. I cannot remember if this situation really happened or not. But I preferred this remember about that night because my parents says to me that when someone, that we do not know who was, murdered my godfather I was there.

Laura Marcela Pérez M.
201210052
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Lucía Rincón 17 August 2015 at 19:39
HIGH SCHOOL, AN UNFORGETTABLE EXPERIENCE.

When I finished primary school, I was so excited and happy because it was time to go to high school; at least, that was what I felt. I remember many people who said that high school had been the best experience in their lives. There, they lived incredible moments, met their best friends, and many of them met their first love, but was everything as wonderful as they said?

I was 11 years ago when I went to high school. I studied in a small school in rural area where I lived, but since then, I went to study to La Presentación school of Soatá. In my first day of class I was very happy to be there and know different people. As the time went by, many classmates became best friends, and I always was alone. I was a little shy and I was the shortest of the class. It was difficult for me to socialize with other people. Then, I focused my attention in give the best of me in every class.

Next year came and my grades were better every period. I became the class representative. Soon, things were getting worse for me. I had to control discipline; nobody obeyed me, my classmates hated that I asked them to make order or silence. Besides, they started to laugh at me because of my appearance, and offended me telling horrible things. I was in this position for two years. I was tired of the situation. Then, I decided not to continue as representative. Also, I remember that some classmates wanted to be my friends, just because they wanted me to do their homework or help them in evaluations. This made me feel very bad. Finally, a new girl came and she became my best friend for the last three years of school, things were better for me.

In conclusion, I consider that my experience at high school was not the best. Although, I learned a lot of things, met some special people, and lived good moments. High school is a stage in my life that I would not repeat again.

LUCÍA RINCÓN

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Johana17 August 2015 at 19:48
THE SPARK OF MY LIFE

If you ask me about a story, probably a will talk about cats. But that is not interesting for some people. Well, the most exciting in my life are my sisters, they are like two little chucky, but I love them.

The only day that we did not fight was when each one of them born. The day was pretty hard to me, because it means one night without mom, one night alone, well with my father, that is the same thing. My younger sister born the day that Papa Juan Pablo II died, but our only worry was my mom and the baby. I was 11 years old. The previous night my sister Laura and I decided to sleep with my father. That was a chaos. Laura suffers hemorrhage since she was 1 year and a half, that night she suffered hemorrhage, but we did nor realize until 5 or 5:30 in the morning, when my father wake up all the bed was full of blood, for my sister was so difficult to breath, because her nose was blocked up, we must to got up, bring the child to the bathroom, and bring her a shower, to clean up all the blood, but that din not finish there, we must to cleaned up the bed too.

After all the disaster, we went to the hospital to visit my mom, Laura and I could not see our younger sister because we were so young, but I really wanted to see my sister.

I have a terrible sense of find a way, nut I wanted to look for my sister, I took an alternative way, but I arrive to nowhere, I opened a lot of doors, and look for in every where, but I did not find my sister and my mom. I must to waited until they leave the hospital.

My house without my mom is a chaos, but I have my sisters and I love them, in my way. We have a lot of wonderful and funny memories, but most of the time we are fighting.

It is amazing to have sisters.

Érika Johana Arango Suárez.
201110406
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Unknown17 August 2015 at 21:09
I always have lived in the countryside. My childhood was sorrounded by animals, trees, flowers and many beautiful things. Really it was the best stage of my life until now. In my childhood I lived in the grandmother´s house, the house was big and old. Now that I think do not know why at the time there was no bathroom. Then, when we had to go at bathroom, we had to go out.

I was four or five years old. My parents had the habit of carry me at bathroom before of go to sleep.

One night as usual, they were waiting me while I went. After ten minutes I did not return to them. Then my parents were very worried and they decided go to search me around the house. But they did not find me.

For them I could be in risk because next to home there were many animals and a big tank. also, in the darkness something bad could happen.

My parents searched me in the forest but they did not find me. Also they searched in the garden but nor. My mom was so worried that she began to cry. After one hour, my dad found me among the sheep. I was stroking to my pretty sheep. Although I had my eyes open, I did not respond to their claims.
The next morning I did not remember absolutely anything. In that moment I understood that I had a sleepwalking problem.

With this experience I can say that when someone is sleepwalk can see very good at night.
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lorena ruiz18 August 2015 at 07:20
love does't give reasons.
Love is not as you think that it is until you meet someone who shows you another face of the world while it is burning, someone who makes you feel alive while is killing you.
Love never meant for me as well as for others. I was a person who wanted to love everyone as possible without thinking or expecting something back, my mom used to say that someday I would love so much that I would stay empty and I knew it by the hardest way.
I was free, free to love all and one at the same time, really, believe me, I laughed, cried, sang, whistled, and loved, loved without barriers, I loved different people, some people loved me too and others don’t, but this didn’t matter to me I felt comfortable with myself I loved myself so I never felt the necessity of being loved… just until I met him.
He appears like an hurricane, suddenly, and I was happy because it was new for me, because he loves as an hurricane; desperately as me, and I think that it would be good I would not have to explain that I was free and I wanted to go on, It seemed to be easy, a love like the others, but no, he made me feel different, and I started to need him, I discovered a new kind of love and it felt good.
he said me a lot of important words, he made me think that he needed me more than I. It was ridiculous, he did not need me more than any and one day he just decided to get out of my life, leaving on me scratches, sadness without giving me an explanation, a just reason, He disappeared without a signal , without to say a "why " , he disappeared as if he never had existed
He loved me on the way as I loved other people and just until that moment I could see the damage that I left into the people’s hearts that I once loved.
In the middle of the church, I understood that he left me because he realized that I loved him as he did not know, I love himself… as me.
In the middle of church love left me without giving me a reason, while in my mind an important phrase became to come up...
"In the love, suffering is bigger for who stayed than for who decided to go"
The day of my wedding wasn't the best day in my life, wasn't the day that I would start to love plentifully, that day was the day that mi heart became a stone...
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Unknown20 August 2015 at 16:25
I’m going to tell you about a special story for me, that refers to do real the most important thing in my life in that epoch, it was, try to find a Dean dime Darrel Guitar ohm Jesus Christ this was really hard because first of all in those times, money was little in my life cause I didn’t have a job and I was thinking in that epoch save some money to do real my dream. I had to do too much things, between those things I had to sing for drunk people and I played my guitar too, but my big mistake was fall in deceit of think maintain my money in my pocket because first of all I have a big heart, therefore when I was playing my guitar with my friends some people in the street (homeless) praying for food or money arrived to me, Jesus you didn’t know what happen in my mind yea it was causing in my heart only sadness and sorrow and in my mind images of horror about those poor lifes so then when I had money always I was looking for the homeless in the nights for give them my money for try to help their lifes and was good for me because nowadays when those people see me don’t try to steal me, ok well backing to my main theme never I could save the real price of my dream, my guitar only I was a dreamer, but the life is the life and god is great my mom give in Christmas the last year the money for my guitar, she was looking me during some time and one day she said me do you want that dime Darrel guitar? And I said of course and she gave me the money and I bought my dear guitar and sound really nice, the life back me my generosity and gave me a prize.

(Diego Mariño)
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Unknown20 August 2015 at 18:33
Hi Nataly! There are some mistakes
L1 WT:I always think
Correction: I have always thought.
L4 WF, WT and P:I am only child but I have...
Correction: I was only a child,but I have..
L5 WF:I am the youngest of they
Correction: I am the youngest of them
L11 WT and M:I was three years my life gives a storn turn.
Correction: I was three years when my life gave a stron turn.
L15 WT: he had to change his lifestyle
Correction: he has changed his lifestyle.
L16 WT:he had left many things.
Correctio: he has left many things.
L17WT: he had to learn to cook and to brush my hear.
Correction: he has learned to cook and to brush my hear.
L22 to L26 you have some mistakes with P, for example whe you wrote: I was growing I have got.... correction: I was growing,I have got ....
You story is very sad 😯
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Unknown20 August 2015 at 18:59

Line 1: WT: I always think: I’ve always thought

Line 2: RW: I was born on 15 of May in 1994: I was born on 15th May, 1994.

Line 2: RW: I am only child: I am the only child of my parents

Line 3: WW: I am the youngest of they: I am the youngest/ I am the youngest in my family/ I am the youngest of
them

Line 5: RW: We lived in a big house without problems: We lived in a big house and we didn’t have problems

Line 6: WT: when I was three years my life gives a strong turn: … my life gave a strong turn

Line 7: WW: but a morning of December: But one morning of December

Line 11: RW: I have got by understood

Laura Marcela Pérez
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Unknown20 August 2015 at 21:22
HI July Alejandra

L 1: “Difficulties for preparing ordinary people to extraordinary destinations (I would say you that is more grammatical with the connector for
L:2 I wanted to tell a story that marked my life, where (I had to face different situations) to understand that life sometimes puts you proofs to see how strong are you?---------( I'm going to leave you clear one thing ,,,( you say, I had to face....) but in my case I prefer say (I had to deal different situations) because is more specific hon,....
L:11 You say,,, That situation does me think about,. Could you say better (That situation makes me think about.,,,,,,,,)

corrected by Diego Mariño
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Fredy Dueñas30 August 2015 at 18:09
Continue working on aspects related to your linguistic competence, according to the given suggestions and the weaknesses you consider relevant to be overpassed.
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